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 Post subject: Re: Descendants 2nd Gen.
PostPosted: May 28th, 2010, 10:29 pm 
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teehee >:3

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 Post subject: Re: Descendants 2nd Gen.
PostPosted: July 1st, 2010, 9:31 am 
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I totally love this story! I haven't gotten through it all the way (I'm at chapter 24), but it is awsome! I like Sheik the best, he being the shadow sage and all. It reminded me though of on WarHammer Online a witch elf in guy version. lol :j http://warhammeronline.wikia.com/wiki/Witch_Elf
And Aerica kinda reminds me of a Shadow Warrior... http://warhammeronline.wikia.com/wiki/Shadow_Warrior
Anywhy great job I love Link!

Is the orcana of time a good one to play? I've played the wind bender and twilight princess and I think I had one for the gameboy... But anywhy is it a good game? I might get it after reading this.

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 Post subject: Re: Descendants 2nd Gen.
PostPosted: July 1st, 2010, 1:32 pm 
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Sorry, the story's not entirley my style of my reading, but I congratulate you for having the most succesful topic on these forums, the story must be great!

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 Post subject: Re: Descendants 2nd Gen.
PostPosted: July 2nd, 2010, 10:25 am 
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How dare you end it here! >:O Oh so much suspence! You have to write more! I love your story! Is Dahrin going to get killed? Or will someone jump in and save him and Aercia? Find out later!

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 Post subject: Re: Descendants 2nd Gen.
PostPosted: July 3rd, 2010, 10:06 am 
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You know I was bored so I started counting the >:3 smilies. Guess how many there were without your signiture... 29 times! lol :wutno: I can't wait till you post more!

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 Post subject: Re: Descendants 2nd Gen.
PostPosted: July 15th, 2010, 1:20 pm 
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howdy, glad to get a new fan ^_^
thanks for the feedback Hydra :)
to answer your questions:
1. yes ocarina of time is awesome!
2. I have to say SHeik is one of my favorites as well, its hard fleshing out so many characters, and i never played warhammer online.
3. well, my computer up and decided it had no sound card so i went through a long time of wiping and reloading so hence the reason of no updates, but! i finally wrote some more so maybe sometime soon i can finish chapter 29 soon
4. I love to write cliff hangers >:3 (#30) keeps you coming back.

thanks gingerleaf for the comment :)

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 Post subject: Re: Descendants 2nd Gen.
PostPosted: July 15th, 2010, 2:17 pm 
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and here's some more of chapter 29, not quite done with it yet though :P

Krell screamed as Dahrin’s blades got closer and closer to him. There was a flash of bluish grey and Dahrin was stopped. Dahrin glared to his left at Calhan who had caught his blades with his own. Calhan’s right side was pressed against Dahrin’s left.
“Back off, Eshen.” Calhan growled.
Calhan was hard pressed to hold Dahrin’s blades away from Aerica, but somehow he managed.
“Well, if it isn’t the bookworm, how’ve you be-“ Dahrin stopped mid cackle as Calhan kicked him in the side away from Aerica.
“I said, back off. Disappear.” Calhan said menacingly as he drew symbols in the air in front of him. Dahrin’s eyes widened as Calhan finished the spell and shot it at him.
Dahrin’s eyes rolled into the back of his head and he collapsed. Calhan sighed then turned to Krell who cowered against the wall.
“Don’t hurt me!” Krell cried.
“I won’t, she will later though.” Calhan said calmly as he drew more symbols in the air in front of Aerica’s face. He finished then touched Aerica’s forehead.
Krell screamed in agony as a bright light enveloped Aerica’s body. Calhan stepped back as the light faded and Aerica fell to the ground at his feet, her body restored to normal.
A green mist hovered above Aerica’s body for a moment then flew to the temple and disappeared from sight.
Calhan stared at the place it had disappeared to till he heard Dahrin groan.
“Ow, my head.” Dahrin said softly as he slowly sat up, “What happened?”
“What do you remember?” Calhan asked him as he kneeled down to examine a rather large bump that was developing on the back of Dahrin’s head.
“Not being able to breathe, then evil laughter….and then possibly you kicking me in the rib-GAH” Dahrin cried in pain as Calhan poked him in the side where he had hit him.
“Yeah, sorry about that, I think I cracked one of your ribs.” Calhan said patting him on the shoulder as he stood up to check Aerica.
“No kidding. How is she?” Dahrin asked.
“She’ll be alright. Physically anyways.” Calhan sighed as he stood up and started walking to Meria’s wall of wind.
He drew more symbols in the air and the wall of wind began to die down. The group inside the wall smiled when they saw him.
“I was starting to worry.” Meria said as she sat down out of breath.
“How’s Gerad?” Calhan asked brushing past everyone and kneeling down beside Selene.
“He won’t wake up.” Selene answered then glanced to Aerica and Dahrin.
“Go tend to them, I’ll take care of Gerad.” Calhan ordered as he scooped Gerad into his arms.
“Wha-“ Lucius started to ask but was interrupted as Calhan disappeared in a flash of bluish light along with Gerad.
“Ok, was that really even Calhan?” Sheik asked interrupting the stunned silence.
“I don’t really know.” Lucius said hesitantly.
“It smelled like him, and acted like him in the way of answering questions.” Dahrin sighed then grunted from the pain of his rib.
“Here let me see.” Selene said as she pulled up Dahrin’s shirt. His left side was black and blue from the broken ribs.
“How did that happen?” Selene asked gently probing, her fingertips glowed white and whereve she touched the skin returned to its original healthy olive tone.
“I think Calhan kicked me. But I blacked out so I’m not too sure.” Dahrin replied pulling his shirt back down into place once Selene was done.

figured i'd give you a different cliff to hang off of muhahahaha >:3

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 Post subject: Re: Descendants 2nd Gen.
PostPosted: July 15th, 2010, 2:37 pm 
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Yay for Calhan! :yahoo:

"yes ocarina of time is awesome!" I agree. I just got it on Saturday... and I am already adult Link... lol :-)

"well, my computer up and decided it had no sound card so i went through a long time of wiping and reloading so hence the reason of no updates, but! i finally wrote some more so maybe sometime soon i can finish chapter 29 soon" I hate when those things happen... But I'm glad your back and writing! :amused:

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 Post subject: Re: Descendants 2nd Gen.
PostPosted: July 15th, 2010, 9:33 pm 
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Selene stood up and walked to Aerica. As she knelt down Aerica’s eyes fluttered open.
“How’re you feeling?” Selene asked softly. Aerica stared at her; her eyes teared and she began to sob.

“Gerad! Wake up.” Gerad heard his name being shouted at him again. He opened his eyes then groaned. He was in the Chamber of Sages once again and his gut was burning in pain.
“What happened this time?” Gerad asked as he sat up slowly. Glancing around, he saw Calhan standing on the Lore symbol once again, but no sign of the goddesses.
“Oh, the usual; Aerica stabbed you, you almost died, Dahrin went into crazy psychopathic killer mode, I saved the day, you know, the usual.” Calhan said in a nonchalant sarcastic voice.
“Ok, then why are we here?” Gerad asked clowly standing to his feet.
“Because you almost died, Selene managed to heal your body but…” Calhan hesitated.
“But, what?” Gerad asked not too sure he liked where this was going.
Calhan took a deep breath but didn’t continue he stood there debating with himself.
“Oh spit it out!” Gerad cried, the anticipation killing him.
“You were already ‘dead’ so to speak. Your soul had left your body and was being devoured by Aerica’s body. I had to bring you here so I could reattatch your soul to your body.” Calhan explained pointing to the floor behind Gerad.
Gerad turned to see what he was pointing at and saw his body, “Ok, that’s freaky.”

end of chapter 29 ^_^

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 Post subject: Re: Descendants 2nd Gen.
PostPosted: July 16th, 2010, 8:05 am 
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Nice. Yeah that is freaky!

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