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“Well, hello sugarcakes. How’s my favorite whore?” Ganondorf sneered.
“What are you doing here?” Nabooru asked her voice cold and harsh.
Ganondorf chuckled harshly turning his gaze back to Dahrin who was sitting on his knees holding his side.
“Just playing.” Ganondorf smirked, he moved so fast Gerad swore he had phased out of Nabooru’s grasp and hit her away.
Impa moved in to attack as Ganondorf cackled. He slapped his hands together and a thunderclap rolled. There was a bright flash of light and Ganondorf was gone. Only the mocking sound of his laughter left.
Everyone stared at each other in stunned silence, the adults tended to the children. Lucius’s arm was fractured from his wrist to elbow. Dahrin’s ribs were broken, again. Aerica had landed on her wrist and had sprained it badly. A couple of Sheik’s teeth had been knocked out. Meria’s nose was broken and still bled slightly. Gerad’s jaw hurt profusely but was miraculous unbroken. G-Link had a huge purple bruise on his belly from where Ganondorf had hit him.
The only one not injured was Selene, but she was passed out from using up all her Sage energy. Calhan took her pulse and assured Gerad she was alive just tired.
“Was it just me or did we get our butts royally handed to us?” Sheik asked spitting out some blood. Impa tsked at him as she gently grabbed his face to inspect the damage.
“I would agree that wasn’t one of our finest moments.” Lucius replied levelly as Ruto splinted his arm.
“I thought ya’ll did well, considering who you were fighting.” Nabooru interjected she smiled tenderly at Dahrin and moved a stray strand of hair behind his ear.
“What I want to know is, why now?” Gerad mused tenderly probing his jaw.
“Maybe he happened to be in the neighborhood?” Meria suggested, her voice was somewhat nasally due to the bandage she had pressed to her nose with her head tilted back.
“What like, ‘Oh I was just on my way to the market and happened to see you guys, and thought I’d pop over for a visit’?” Sheik asked imitating Ganondorf’s deep bass voice.
“Nah, I think he would strut not pop.” Gerad said with a chuckle.
“What, no waltz?” Dahrin asked with mock surprise.
“Heck no, he would definitely strut.” Nabooru chided him jokingly.
The rest of the them joined in the laughter and the tension slowly eased as everyone realized that even though they had encountered Ganondorf, they had emerged alive if not unharmed.
“So, how did you guys appear out of nowhere?” Sheik asked his mom as she tried to straighten out his hair.
Impa sighed, “We had been tracking him.”
“Well, not the physical him.” Nabooru clarified, “Ganondorf, we believe is not quite up to strength, he’s been holed up in some other dimension and operating through minions. Not the evil henchmen kind but the evil vessel kind.”
“We’ve discovered that they’re crows with red eyes and silver collars.” Ruto said from where she sat next to Lucius. Ruto had been very liberal with the bandages, the result being Lucius’s arm looking rather mummy-like.
“That still doesn’t explain how you swooped in out of nowhere and pulled our buns out of the fire, so to speak.” Gerad pointed out.
“Being sages has its privileges. One of them is being able to travel in spirit form.” Calhan answered.
“And spirit form is?” Aerica asked.
“The sage’s body becomes a mass of energy that can move a thousand times faster than the fastest race horse. The reason it seemed they arrived out of nowhere was because they technically did.” Calhan replied going into teacher lecture mode.
Sheik raised his hand, “I have a dummy question.”
“Yes?” Calhan asked turning to him. He clasped his hands behind his back and waited patiently for the question.
“If you knew that there was this kind of transportation. Why on earth have we been walking?” Sheik asked.
“Because you guys are not old enough to use it.” Impa answered before Calhan could go into a long lecture about complicated mathematics and physics.
“Why not?” Sheik asked his voice shrilling slightly.
“Because we’re still alive, that power only passes to the descendant when the previous is dead.” Ruto answered.

and that's all i gots till next time!

Cool! I wish I could travel that fast! lol But I have a question. Was that Ganondorf? or was it someone else with Ganon controlling it?

it was a projection of ganon, does that make sense? like he isn't quite up to full power to take over the world yet.

Ah! That's what I thought! I knew there was something weird about those birds!

so my laptop died, and thankfully my stories were able to be retrieved, but now i don't have a laptop or computer to work on them so there will be more a delays in updates till i can get a new one....but i'm still thinking of the stories its not dead i promise! ^_^

Ok! Don't worry! I just got back from my vacation and have to do a lot of stuff. So I wouldn't be able to read it anyways for a while.

so i'm not dead i promise and to prove it i finished the chapter muhahahaha enjoy

“Oh.” Sheik replied.
“So what now?” Gerad asked rubbing his eyes, “Even if it was just a pseudo Ganondorf we still got royally beaten.”
Calhan took a deep breath and let it out slowly, “I don't know.”
“I will be taking Sheik to train him more in the way of the Shadows.” Impa stated as she stood up.
“Wait, what?” Sheik asked shocked.
“As pointed out by Gerad, you and the others are far from ready for Ganondorf. And as such I will be personally taking over your training.” Impa replied folding her arms across her chest.
“Wait, don't I get a say in the matter?” Sheik asked standing up as well, he wobbled slightly from the blood rush.
“No, you do not.” Impa replied returning his pleading gaze with cold eyes.
“But, mom, I don't want to leave my friends.” Sheik said in a small voice, slowly realizing his mother wasn't going to bend on this issue.
Impa's gaze softened slightly as she replied, “Sheik, I know you love your friends, but your friends need you to train yourself to become better. So that the next time you can save them.”
“She's right Sheik.” Meria said, “Go, train with your mom, become stronger. We'll see each other again soon.”
Sheik seemed to gain some spirit back from Meria's words, “Alright, I’ll go. Don't die on me in the mean time.”
“Not on your life.” Meria promised with a smile.
“Guys, take care, I’ll be back.” Sheik promised them as Impa and him disappeared with a bang and a cloud of smoke.
“Link and I will be heading back to Death Mountain to train as well. We will meet again.” Darunia stated as he curled up into a ball and rolled off at a break neck speed. G-Link smiled at his friends and followed after his father.
“That fickle rock! No good-bye. Good riddance.” Lucius mumbled to himself.
“We are leaving as well, Lucius.” Ruto told him softly.
“I understand. Don't go messing with anybody's mind while I'm gone, got it?” Lucius said pointing his finger accusingly at the rest of them.
Gerad chuckled and held up his hands, “No promises, man.”
Lucius rolled his eyes and left with his mother. When they were about twenty feet away from the group a giant ball of water swallowed them and raced toward Zora's Doman.
“Anybody else?” Gerad asked turning to those remaining. Selene was still passed out on the ground next to Calhan. Aerica stared sheepishly at her boots.
“Go, it's alright.” Gerad told her smiling softly.
“I will get better, and I will come back.” Aerica promised.
“We will send your horses and supplies to you once we return to Kokiri. Take care.” Saria told them as she and Aerica left.
Gerad watched them disappear out of view and turned back to the rest of the group. Meria had gone and sat down next to Selene.
“Well?” Gerad asked her.
Meria looked up, “Well what? If you hadn't notice I’m the only Wind Sage, Gerad. Calhan's got all the answers for me.”
Gerad shrugged, “Fair enough, and you Dahrin?”
“We will travel with you to Gerudo Fortress, and figure it out after that.” Dahrin replied. Nabooru nodded, she stood up and looked to the setting sun.
“So the Heroes of old will train the next generation. It will definitely be interesting.” Calhan sighed.

I think I'll read the story when I'm done with this drawing right now. It's obviously really good.

They're splitting up?!? What!? You really like to put twists in your story! I can't wait for the next part!!!!

haha, thanks Ginger

yeah I decided to split them up, so I could focus more on pushing the actual plot along. Rinse and repeat stories are boring to me so i didn't want that to happen with this one