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Ok so I'm working on a book so ive got a few chapters for that. then i also have a Song i want some to look at.

so here is the song to start off:
Who says all Demons are bad? (A Different Kind of Guardian Angel)
Jacob William “Zzyzx” Call

V1:
I’m your shadow by day
And your moon by night
No matter what he says
Yours is the battle I’m willing to fight

V2:
Unseen until needed I’m here
Forever and always to protect you
From those who would bring you pain
You have no reason to fear

Chrs:
He watches as you sleep in bed
While I sit out in the cold
I keep the darker fiends at bay
For I have no boundaries to behold
That is the price we all must pay

For I’m a different kind of angel
The one you never see
Most think of me as evil
But evil isn’t me

Who said all Demons were bad?
Most of my kin rely on pain
I could never bear to see you sad
It would leave scars upon my brain

V3:
We all have our angels
But yours is a special case
For you have a Demon
Ready and willing to die in your place

V4:
I laugh in the face of opposition
For they have no room to talk
My leathered wings are in position
Ready to shield you from the onslaught

Chrs.

Like the song!
Might want to cut out some parts, just for the rythm and stuffs...

Catchy. I like it.