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GRRRR its all wrong! i do need help and i knoe her left arm looks wobbly lol and her chest area looks too big and to me her head looks too small >.<

I agree with you but I think the spear turned out great and your desogn is also very good. I have a good tips that helped me out. I'm not very good at anatomy but I start with a stick figure with a circle as a head and a cross inside the circle to help me place eyes etc, and build up my figure from that. That way I can hinder the limbs from looking woobly. It really works, at least for me. You can sketch a light stick figure over your drawing now and try for yourself. And I think that the only thing wrong with her bust size is that her hips should be more rounded and probably a bit bigger, and her left, our right, breast is a little smaller than the other one. Keep up the good work and use real life references and you'll improve in no time^^

as it was keeping the pose you already had and having the spear in both hands is quite impossible, if you want the spear in both hands you would need the elbow raised to atleast be eye level. hope this is helpful

Elflady: Yeah i do the head like that but i dont do the body step part, i guess im not used to doing it that way or i just suck at it lol. Thank you.

GracefulComet: Thnak you! you did it better than me lol. ill start again and this time i will start off doing the steps (maybe). thank you.

yeah no problem, if this continues to give you problems maybe you might wanna move to a larger paper size, i find it easier sometimes if i simply have more room to work with.

So in the end i did it step by step and it turned out much better than the original. The top of her head looks to...well flat i think is the word to use -.- but it will be fixed.



lol i just noticed that her left leg is bigger than the right >.<

Yes, your second attempt is much improved! ^^
Let's see... the only thing I notice right off on this new one is her hand is quite small; her fingers especially are tiny. Try spreading your own hand over your face to get an idea of how big it is compared to your head; that might help.

OMG i love it :3
i love the design on her corset
it makes me so happy when i see another artist's improvment

EEEKKK!! im soooo happy of how it came out. It is completly differant to what i normaly do (wich is mainly lineless) But i cant help but get the feeling that its not finshed, and yes i did change the pattern on her corset the original pattern wasent really working. And sorry about the wriggaly lines i had to do it on a mouse pad >.<. So tell me what you think.

Mouse pad? like as in a laptop touch pad?
if so *bows at your finger control*
i find with a laser mouse it is much easier to do computer graphix as long as you have a steady hand, but nothing beats a tablet.
im a little sad you had to change the corset, but your background is more than i could have managed even with a tablet. i like the little symbol on her stalking/leggings
anyways good job hope to see more art from you