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Going to make a ref sheet of that thing...

It is a mount of a society living in the savanna region. Those creatures can communicate with images telepathically and they possess a tattoo or symbol on their shoulders representing who they are in a strange language no one knows. They are not very fast but they have a great endurance and they are intelligent (maybe like a dog but much more calm). They are also very strong but not aggressive at all, unless someone bothers them too much.

Very interesting critter! I notice some things though and was wondering if it'd be ok if I did a redline?

sure, it would be nice ^^

The most obvious thing I noticed was that you drew the front legs like they were back legs. I don't know if that was intentional or not (if so, you may deisregard the redline :P), but I made that the focus of the redline. The biggest thing to remember is that most animals have a skeletal structure very similar to our. The front legs tend to resemble arms and the back legs tend to resemble our legs. I think what I scribbled on the redline explains that more than any of my yammering would. :P I also felt the neck was a bit too straight, so I mocked up a quick neck for you too. By no means am I an expert in anatomy, but I hope it helped. ^^


oh, and I used this for reference, in case you wanted to know

Thanks, it sure helps ^^ and I see your point. I'll keep working on it.

Update :o

I'll next be working on the fur and the horns and claws. I am also not satisfied with the right paw...can't figure out how to place the fingers...I don't want that paw to be firmly on the ground, it only has a little weight on it.

lol, this is the only photo I could find that may be able to help with the paw. Not very big and the cat's angle isn't very good, but I hope its good enough to be useful. :/

It's getting kind of late, so forgive me if I sound incoherent or something...! o_O

I did some redlines though, but I'm not very good with this sort of perspective, but uh... I TRIED.

I attempted to make it look like that foot was only lightly touching the ground by making it appear a bit like you were viewing the foot from above, so I tried not to have much in the way of lines at the tops of the toes, but gave it some *slight* horizontal lines there (it's a bit messy there, but I hope you can see what I did well enough) to make it seem like there was a little bit of pressure on the toes...!

I deepened the chest there too, since it seemed a bit short to me, or like there wasn't enough chest below where the neck connected to the body...! Yes! Then I ended up noticing that it seemed like the creature was leaning a bit to the left, so I just grabbed the transform tool and rotated it to make that leg to our left look more vertical, like it was standing straight up. If I didn't have the transform tool, I'd probably have a lot of drawings that looked like they were leaning one way or the other! At least it's an easy fix. o_O

I did some slight facial adjustments since from this angle, you'd probably be able to see the creature's cheek bone on that side of the face that's furthest away from us, and I pushed the eye to our left closer to the middle of the face to make it look a bit more symmetrical...! And uh... uh... uh... uh...! There are some blue scribbly bones there that are barely visible which I used to try and help myself with the redlines and just uh... left there. I was trying to reference skeletal/muscle diagrams in a book about animal anatomy, but I'm probably tired and did so sloppily. Pfft!

Anyway, uh... I hope that helps! I like the long neck on this creature, by the way! And those little bells on its tail. I like bells like that! The feathers hanging from strings are a nice touch as well. It makes me think of Native American sorts of things!

Thank you Firequill. That will help yeah XD But it was intentional that it lay a little bit to the left, most of its weigth on its right (our left) paws...for the pose you know XD

I think it is done Oo Will work on a ref sheet for it now...and I will need a name if anyone has some more imagination than I do, feel free to write some ^^;

Thanks to everyone's comments/redlines/and help. Was very useful :D