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 Post subject: Critique?
PostPosted: March 18th, 2009, 5:08 pm 
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 Post subject: Re: Critique?
PostPosted: March 18th, 2009, 7:01 pm 
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Is that a pirate draik?

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 Post subject: Re: Critique?
PostPosted: March 18th, 2009, 7:36 pm 
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 Post subject: Re: Critique?
PostPosted: March 18th, 2009, 8:08 pm 
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Good! Being a fully fledged neopets addict (Dragonstorm_75) I can help you out! Draiks tend to be freaky curvy as pets so having a flat stomach is kind of awkward. Having it puff out a bit at the chest (I can see you have that already!) curve in at the torso and then puff out a bit less at the pelvis would make the draik a bit more realistic. Same with the back - start off with a bulge where the shoulders are, curve up towards the bum, and then add a smaller bulge for the hind.

The wings and limbs also need bone and muscle, in other words, they need to be more defined. Right now, they kind of look like sausages bent at 90 degree angles. If you look at Neondragon's pictures in the archives, you can see such definition.

It would also be a good idea to curve the neck and tail more to add flow to the picture. Tada! I hope you understood what I said, I can't do redlines because I don't have a tablet and CS2 is a pain to start up. o-o'''

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 Post subject: Re: Critique?
PostPosted: March 18th, 2009, 8:48 pm 
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I agree with everything Dragon said, I just noticed something. Isn't the hook a tad bit small for the draikes mass? Can't really say much other than that, I don't really play Neopets.

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 Post subject: Re: Critique?
PostPosted: March 19th, 2009, 4:13 pm 
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Thanks, dragon. ^^

Btw, the dragon is laying, hense the flat belly.

And I just noticed the abnormally small hook. xD

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 Post subject: Re: Critique?
PostPosted: March 19th, 2009, 7:23 pm 
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One thing I noticed is that the front wing (the draik's right) seems to be connected to the very top of the back, and makes it look "undefined" as Dragon said. If you lower the base of the wing and make it a little bit more round, like a person's shoulder, then it will not appear as detached.

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 Post subject: Re: Critique?
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Okay, thank you! ^^ :amused:

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 Post subject: Re: Critique?
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redlines :) sorry i didn't see that he was laying :wiii:


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 Post subject: Re: Critique?
PostPosted: August 15th, 2009, 3:53 pm 
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I don't know what a "pirate draik" fro neopets looks like, but these are some redlines that fix up the anatomy a bit.
The bit circled in blue is sort of how you currently have the back leg positioned, it looks a bit awkward and cramped in that position, I suggest having the leg stretched out more instead of having it all curled up like that.
I hope that helps.


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