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 Post subject: Re: Descendants 2nd Gen.
PostPosted: April 22nd, 2009, 6:29 pm 
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Was that all of part 12 or is there more of part 12. Anyway that was super with the awesomeness and suspense. I am not sure what will happen but I would think it is Meria turn to use her powers or Aerica will get the siren with her arrows. :amused: :weird:

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 Post subject: Re: Descendants 2nd Gen.
PostPosted: April 22nd, 2009, 7:13 pm 
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 Post subject: Re: Descendants 2nd Gen.
PostPosted: April 22nd, 2009, 9:12 pm 
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YOu must really like that smiley, and that was an approrpriate response.If I was you I would write new chapters and post less. I want to start writing my story again but I forgot what I was going to write so I will have to make up something that was not my original approach.

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 Post subject: Re: Descendants 2nd Gen.
PostPosted: April 23rd, 2009, 7:56 pm 
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yesh it are my favorite >:3

and the rest of chapter 12 ^_^

The guys made their way to the entrance and Selene quickly signed for the girls to fall back. Meria and Aerica didn’t argue as they followed Selene back down the corridor.
“This is nuts. What the heck was that thing on the throne?” Selene asked of no one in particular and the world in general. Meria shrugged her shoulders having no answer to give.
Moving further down the corridor the girls paused by the wagon they had found Meko at to catch their breath.
Aerica shrieked as she fell to the ground and started sliding towards the shadow the wagon cast on the ground.
“Aerica!” Selene and Meria cried out as they lunged for her outstretched hands. Selene got a hold of Aerica’s left arm and grabbed hold of the edge of the wagon. Meria grabbed Selene as her grip slipped from the wagon.
“What the heck is it?” Aerica screamed as she slipped a few inches further into the shadow. It appeared that she was going through the floor but the part of her body that was already in the shadow was gone.
“Ah, the only thing I know of that can do that,” Meria grunted, “is Sheik!”
Selene tried to pull Aerica back out with only her right arm, but Selene didn’t have the strength, if it was Sheik someone else was helping him.
Meria got her arms around Selene and pulled using her whole body weight; Aerica came out of the shadow up to her knees.
“Gah, almost there!” Aerica said trying to pull her legs out.
Selene and Meria strained with all their might and Aerica slowly came out. She was almost out when something surfaced from the shadow.
It was a very big beast, with tentacles. It was a shadowy outline with red glowing eyes, when its mouth opened there were shadowy fangs and a long slithery tongue.
The beast roared and knocked Selene and Meria away with one of its tentacles as it grabbed Aerica with another. Selene landed and rolled up to her feet then had to immediately dive over another tentacle. Meria had landed against a column and was a bit dazed.
“Meria get up!” Selene called to her as she dodged another tentacle then was hit by a second in the air. Selene flew back and slammed into the same column as Meria and almost landed on top of her.
“Guys!” Aerica screamed as the tentacle beast began to sink into the shadow.
“No! Aerica!” Selene screamed getting back up then getting hit back down.
“Figure out what’s go-“ Aerica shouted as she sank deeper.
Aerica disappeared into the shadow and the beast followed shortly after her. Selene got back up and ran to the shadow she jumped and landed on solid ground. The rift or whatever it was had closed.
Selene cursed, and then turned to Meria as she came up beside her. Meria held her arm close to her body but only smiled and shook her head at the quizzical look Selene gave her.
“We should keep moving.” Meria said turning away from the shadow.
Selene nodded and wiped away a tear, “Where should we go?”
Meria looked around their position, “Well, we should probably arm ourselves, and all our things are still with the horses, so we should probably find them to get our stuff.”
Selene pursed her lips as she turned around looking for a sign or clue as to where the horses might be.
“Got any ideas?” Selene asked Meria after she had made a full 360.
Meria chuckled, “Nope.” She started walking in a random direction away from the corridor to the throne room. Selene shrugged and followed after her.

Some time later, and a few close calls with wandering groups of males, the two of them found the stables. Selene glanced around the entrance and saw that there was one Hylien male as a guard.
She held up one finger to convey this info to Meria. Meria nodded and waited while Selene crept around the corner.
Selene crept up behind the guy and whacked him across the back of the head with a piece of wood. He crumbled down to the floor unconscious. Meria came to stand next to Selene as she knelt down to check his pulse. Selene straitened up and nodded to Meria.
Meria whistled softly and was answered by a neigh further down. The two of them followed the sound to where Eyona was stabled. Meria pet Eyona and was nuzzled back in return. Selene left Meria and Eyona to find Starfire. She found her a few stalls down and was greeted by a friendly neigh and nuzzles as well. Selene retrieved her morning star and shield and promised Starfire she’d be back and made her way out of the stable. Meria met her at the entrance with her quarter staff in hand.
“Well, now what?” Meria asked her.
“Heck if I know.” Selene replied shrugging her shoulders, “Well the way I see it, we can either a: try to leave Zora’s domain and go get help and come back, or b: try to take out that creature and hopefully save everyone and not get killed in the process.”
“Hopefully, yeah that sounds about right.” Meria said, glancing around the entrance into the corridor.
“I believe it would be smarter to go get help, if we can find the way out, than trying to take on a creature we know nothing about while said creature has apparent control of our friends.” Selene leaned against the wall that was suddenly not there. Selene shrieked and flung out her hands as she fell into the rift, Meria grabbed her outstretched hand in time to pull her back out. The two of them raced out the entrance and down the corridor.
“You can’t run forever!” Gerad screamed after them.
Selene glanced back to see him step out of the stables and start after them, Selene cursed again and picked up the pace. Meria followed suit and the two of them sped down the corridor away from Gerad.
“Where’s the entrance?” Selene gasped to Meria; her side was beginning to ache.
“This way I think.” Meria replied and took the lead.
Selene followed as they made their way through more corridors with Gerad right behind them. Gerad was faster and slowly caught up to them. Selene glanced behind just as Gerad made a lunge for her. Selene dodged to the side and Gerad missed by an inch. He landed with a thud and lost distance as he got back up to his feet.
Meria and Selene rounded a corner and Selene ran smack into Dahrin. She bounced back onto the floor as did he. Meria started to slow her pace and turn back but Selene screamed at her to keep going. Selene made it to her feet before Dahrin did and started running just as Gerad came into view.
Meria screamed as one of the shadow creature’s tentacles shot out of a shadow and grabbed her. Selene screamed her name as she grabbed onto her arm.
“Just go! It’s up to you.” Meria said shaking Selene off of her arm and disappearing into the shadow. Selene slammed up against the shadow, “No!”
Selene glanced back and saw Gerad and Dahrin coming fast. She cursed and started running again, hoping it was the right direction. She rounded corner after corner, till things started to look familiar. She saw the entrance gate to Zoro’s domain and sped up to the horrible protest of her muscles. Sweat poured down her face and into her eyes, stinging.
She came to the entrance gate that was closed, two Zora males stood guard. Selene kept her morning star in its holster and brought her shield out.
One of the guards looked up just in time to see a shield bash into his face. He went down, as the other guard unsheathed his sword. Selene brought her shield back up in time to block a swing. She was surprised to find out she knew this Zora. It was Ferloth.
Selene grimaced as she blocked another swing, she didn’t want to hurt Ferloth, but she also didn’t want to be hurt by him either. She dodged a swing and came in close and used her shield in an upwards bash to Ferloth’s face. Ferloth fell and Selene moved to the gate.
The gate was massive; it had to be to secure the entrance of Zoro’s Domain. There appeared to be a small door carved into the gate and Selene tried the handle. It was locked. Selene turned back to Ferloth and checked him for the key, he didn’t have it. She tried the other guard and found a key. Selene took it and tried it in the door. The door unlocked and Selene pulled it open just as Gerad and Dahrin came into view.
“Stop!” Dahrin screamed to her as he ran towards her. She glanced back as she dashed through the door.

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 Post subject: Re: Descendants 2nd Gen.
PostPosted: April 23rd, 2009, 8:17 pm 
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OOOO I want to know what goes on next!!!! But I guess I will have to wait!! :amused: :weird:

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 Post subject: Re: Descendants 2nd Gen.
PostPosted: April 25th, 2009, 9:39 pm 
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Chapter 13

Back to reality....

BAM!

thats what happens next ^_^

muhahahaha

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 Post subject: Re: Descendants 2nd Gen.
PostPosted: April 25th, 2009, 11:38 pm 
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Huh??<drools> Wait a minute!!! I thought you siad there is till chapter 14. Now I have to wait a whole new day to see what happens and if I would find out!!! NNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!I have no idea how I am going to get you back for this!!

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 Post subject: Re: Descendants 2nd Gen.
PostPosted: April 26th, 2009, 7:43 pm 
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Storm Cloud

destruction....was i only ment for that? can storm clouds be beautiful? can we be loved?
or will we only be feared. feared for the destruction we threaten? will anyone ever love a storm cloud?
is all my legacy going to be destruction? will anyone remember the storm cloud as a beautiful thing? or will they only be happy when its gone?
achievments....destruction was my achievment.....will anyone thank me for it? will they look back on it fondly when i'm gone....does it matter?
depressed...labled as such because of what i am? or what you percieve a storm cloud to be? does it matter that i'm needed? or will that fact always be overlooked....even by the storm cloud itself? do we take pleasure in the destruction we bring?
do we feel anything at all?


depressed and being emo.............thoughts that went through my head............yeah....

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 Post subject: Re: Descendants 2nd Gen.
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I like storm clouds if that helps. And if it also helps they bring rain to us so they make the earth reborn after destruction like a pheonix kind of think. So they are our destroyers and saviors.<stares into the distance as the symbolism of the idea strikes me and because I didn't know I could use symbolism>

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 Post subject: Re: Descendants 2nd Gen.
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thanks :wutno:

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