reluctantbrony [Profile] 2013/2/28 - 23:50:41
Freyja Ulfguard again, with an oddly small nose (for her) and oddly David Tennant-y hair. This is her good side, ie the side without the huge scars. (Speaking of scars, I forgot the ones on her neck, oh well.)
Comments and crit welcome.
bludrgn [Profile] 2013/3/2 - 8:16:7
I wanna start by saying: this is good! with some tweeks, it can be improved. :) you have good form, the style is pulled off nicely, the profile line is done well and I don't have a problem with any of the proportions... if this is a guy. :I (your description says 'her' a few times otherwise I wouldn't have guessed... if I'm wrong obviously ignore next parts)
my initial reactions to help tilt towards femality: turn the jawline to be more diagonal/straight from the chin to the earlobe...
thin the neck a tiny bit, have it come straight down form the first curve off the chin. the way it's swinging to the left either makes the neck look short and wide, or like there's gonna be an adamsapple. Ah, that line and the shaded line for the neck tendon will almost meet at the collar bone.
pehaps make the smile less wide.. I know you said the nose is too small, but I think girls will have less nose and more lip space in the profile... soo poutier lips, with a touch of color?
[link] Still looks feminine, though there's a lot of eye makeup.
[link] managed to pass as a /young/ boy.
The shading is also wonderful on the skin, and while I love how it looks in the hair part, a different method may be better for hair. Perhaps just using a smaller brush stroke would add the texture that aggrees with me.
reluctantbrony [Profile] 2013/3/2 - 16:15:17
Thanks for the tips. :3 I have a hard time juggling her, ah, natural femininity and the fact she's about as feminine as a brick- I think your idea about her lips and neck will help her look a bit more like a woman. XD
[anon]miles 2013/3/3 - 14:15:19
bludrgn> while i agree with the majority of your crits, it's not essential for a person to look their gender to *be* their gender. i get confused for all different genders on almost a daily basis, but that doesnt change my own; so just keep that mind =w=
'brony> i reckon she's a cutie, and i really really love the glow from the roses. i think you did a great job with the colours on the skin, too - but i would suggest you push your darks a little bit =w=
blu made some good points about heightening her femininty, so take heed to those points.
reluctantbrony [Profile] 2013/3/4 - 0:54:12
Thank you. <3 I'm a still a little shading-shy, I admit, I need to experiment more. :P